Revision log: 06 (and 05) after the fidelity, fairness, usefulness and public-framing reviews#
Working file, 26–27 September 2026. Records each issue raised in fidelity.md (F), fairness.md (Fa), usefulness.md (U) and public.md (P), whether it was verified against the sources, and what was done. Section numbers refer to the revised 06 unless marked 05. Backups of 05 (pre-revision) and 06 (mid-revision) are in the session scratchpad only.
Outcome codes. FIXED = verified and changed; PARTLY = verified, part applied, rest noted; NOT CHANGED = checked and left, with reason; INTERNAL = a pre-publication gate or question, moved to INTERNAL-notes-for-essay.md §D.
Size. 06 grew from about 18,500 to about 29,000 words (the usefulness review asked for 3,000–4,000 words of additions; the fairness and fidelity fixes added context in many places). Nothing substantive was cut. Candidate cuts are listed in INTERNAL §D.
Fidelity (fidelity.md)#
| # | Issue | Verified | Outcome |
|---|---|---|---|
| F1 | “Apparent agency is ‘illusory’” misstates 2026-01-31 (object is self-awareness; hedged) | Yes (corpus l.38) | FIXED. §4.6 now quotes the hedged self-awareness sentence; functional “stochastic” agency added as real (§3.4, §4.6 Application and Limits). |
| F2 | Open-weights “two strands” attribute others’ views to him (2025-07-23; 2023-07-12) | Yes (both posts) | FIXED. §9.2 row rewritten as “record is thin”, reporting both texts accurately; §7 item 8 drops 2023-07-12 from basis, open-weights application labelled [Inferred, low]. |
| F3 | NANO 2026 “no governance solution” truncated | Yes (NANO l.64–68) | FIXED in §3.6, §7 preamble and §8.4 (claims outcome “evidence”, no measured outcomes). |
| F4 | Pause alignment omits 2023-04-04 call for urgent coordinated action | Yes | FIXED. §3.2 bullet, §4.8 heading and Limits, In brief item and limits sentence. |
| F5 | Hedges dropped: FFTF p.281 “not a zero probability”; broad definition of catastrophic risk | Yes (FFTF-F p.281; 2023-05-31 l.50–52) | FIXED in §4.1, §3.2, In brief. |
| F6 | Containment “almost word for word” overstated; Maynard treats containment as temporary | Yes (2025-07-06 l.76–78) | FIXED. §4.4 relabelled [Inferred, medium], “shares Huang’s premise”, temporary-condition quote added; §11 Symmetry “overlaps with”. |
| F7 | “Careers” claim miscited to NN 2014-03 | Yes (S1: Maynard & Aitken 2016 pp.999–1000) | FIXED. §6.4 cites Maynard & Aitken 2016 p.999 (co-written), cf. NN 2014-03 p.160. |
| F8 | 2026 [mixed] “threat to something it values” cited to 2019 | Yes (2026-07-16 l.126) | FIXED in §8.3; “Garbee lesson” renamed. |
| F9 | In brief labels too high; antitrust, eminence, liability items | Yes | FIXED. Header “[Implied or Inferred]”; items reworded; liability “(low-medium confidence)”. |
| F10 | Labels too high or in wrong scope (§4.6, §5.1, §5.8, §6.1 item 3, §4.3, §5.7, §4.2) | Yes | FIXED in each place as proposed (incl. nearer Huang on personal motive, nearer Klein on structural pressure; “regards that depiction as incomplete”). |
| F11 | April 2026 essays’ provenance not disclosed; 30Y quote truncated | Yes (S6 provenance) | FIXED. New §1.4 bullet; §3.1 full 30Y phrase plus balancing next sentence; §11 note. Same 30Y fix applied in 05 §4 (C3 area). |
| F12 | Series introduction quoted from draft 3 as if published | Yes (draft 3, dated 27 Sept) | INTERNAL (gate). Citation left as planned; all quoted phrases listed for re-check. |
| F13 | Moltbook n.4 misread (subject, tense, Moltbook-specific) | Yes (l.78) | FIXED in §9.3; “distinctive concern” relabelled [Implied]. |
| F14 | Page and slug errors; “Weighing 2009” undefined | Yes (FFTF-D page markers; slugs.txt; S3) | FIXED. p.166; NN 2015-12 p.1006; four full slugs; Weighing 2009 defined in §1.5 and added to 05 App. C. |
| F15 | Clipped or softened quotations (9 items) | Yes, each | FIXED: severity floors + “hidden consequences”; “a potential risk”; “trying hard” + “lack the breadth”; “at worst” smoke-and-mirrors + “valuable role”; “Constitutional AI approach”; first movers “not yet”; PEN 2006 p.32 wording + Testimony 2008 p.8; “may be linear” as the transforming function; “federal capacity” (also §3.6). |
| F16 | Co-authorship and [mixed] flags uneven | Yes | FIXED. Toxicol. Sci. 2011, Nature 2006, ILSI 2005 flagged; §1.4 Trojan bullet widened to pp.11–14; §11 wording corrected. |
Fairness (fairness.md)#
| # | Issue | Verified | Outcome |
|---|---|---|---|
| Fa1 | Proxy table calls Huang outlier on open weights; drops “company practice” finding | Yes (leaders comparison §3; 03 §9.5) | FIXED. Supplier row split (open weights “Partly”; China/chips “No”); company-practice row added; Reading and In brief distinguish statements from practice. |
| Fa2 | “Denies competitive pressure” misstates [40:21]; Meta omitted | Yes (transcript l.609–612; NBC 24 Sept) | FIXED in §4.8, table, In brief (minority with Meta, Andreessen, Mistral). |
| Fa3 | “Safety aperture” rests on inference from absence; “I completely agree” omitted; labs’ discretionary tools omitted | Yes (transcript l.350; 2026-07-16 l.86) | FIXED. §5.2 adds the exchange and Klein’s non-asking; paper’s concession added; table row renamed and downgraded to [Inferred, medium]; In brief caveated. |
| Fa4 | Narayanan and Kapoor missing; only interested parties cited on “what AI is” | Yes (02 §9.2; E4 §2.3) | FIXED in §5.1 (“Who sits where”), §5.4 (“We were wrong”), §9.3, §9.6. |
| Fa5 | Huang’s several auditors ignored in §4.5 | Yes (02 §4.2 All-In) | FIXED in §4.0, §4.5, §5.3, §7 item 3. |
| Fa6 | Conditional lab commitments support Huang’s moral-hazard point; Karnofsky’s affiliation missing | Yes (2026-07-16 l.106; transcript l.817–820) | FIXED. New paragraph in §4.9; §5.4; §9.3 names Karnofsky’s role; §6.3 Reading no longer says “does not touch Huang”. |
| Fa7 | “Inverse error” mischaracterises Huang; unmarked single [mixed] source | Yes (transcript l.495–499) | FIXED. Comparison deleted; replaced with deflationary-mechanism vs non-deflationary-effects reading (02 T9). §3.2 keeps the lecture point with a secure 2020 source added. |
| Fa8 | “Before any product existed” narrows Huang’s containment rule | Yes (transcript l.500–503) | FIXED in §4.4 Limits. |
| Fa9 | In brief compresses “we understand it, obviously” | Yes | FIXED in In brief and table (full clause). |
| Fa10 | Deficit-model reading of water line lacks context, sits in “value” list | Yes (transcript l.1532–1540) | FIXED. Moved to §5.9, full turn quoted, low-medium, veto noted. |
| Fa11 | Interests section one-sided | Yes (02 §8.4 table; 02 §10.2; 03 §9.2) | FIXED in §6.4 and §6.1 item 4 (“the same is true of other self-held stop rules”). |
| Fa12 | 02 wrongly said to apply the Late Lessons lens | Yes | FIXED in §8.5. |
| Fa13 | 04 used as factual source; “Huang’s reading” of restart | Yes (only 04 and M9 carry the 27 June detail) | PARTLY. Row now cites OpenAI’s report and METR, notes sources disagree and that the 27 June detail is unchecked; “consistent with Huang’s containment diagnosis”. Direct check of OpenAI’s report is INTERNAL. |
| Fa14 | Series intro quoted selectively (negative) | Yes (draft 3) | FIXED in §1.6, §11, In brief, §8.5 (“informative because of its depth and breadth”). |
| Fa15 | Hinton “wild guess”; critics welcomed Huang’s bar | Yes (02 C124; 02 §7.1, §9.2) | FIXED in §4.1 and §4.0. |
| Fa16 | “Promoter and overseer” row places state concern in Huang’s column; unverified authority | Yes | FIXED (recast; “reported; not verified”). |
| Fa17 | §7 “Direction” lines read as prescription | Yes | FIXED. All recast as “Where his work points” / “On his reasoning”. |
| Fa18 | Other unmarked single [mixed] sources | Yes | FIXED (§6.1 item 7; §9.2 internal-sequence row; EO 14409 row reduced to what the paper records, no pre-emption position attributed). |
| Fa19 | Ex Machina comparison primes the reader | Yes | FIXED. Film removed from §5.3; principle cited from FFTF p.162. Not moved to §3.7 (unnecessary). |
| Fa20 | Minor overstatements (antitrust; pause; “fantastic”; C083 grade; §5.1 label) | Yes (transcript l.778) | FIXED each. |
| Fa21 | Omissions from Huang’s conditions | Yes (transcript l.1222; 02 §4.2; E1 Scotland; 02 §2.3 Bessent) | FIXED in §4.0 and §4.7. |
| Fa22 | Only OpenAI’s incidents listed | Yes (leaders comparison timeline) | FIXED. Gemini row added to §9.2. |
Usefulness (usefulness.md)#
| # | Issue | Verified | Outcome |
|---|---|---|---|
| U1 | “Broader landscape” not built | Yes (2026-09-15 lists; 2024-08-25 quadrant; 2025-05-04; 2026-07-19) | FIXED. New §8.6 with quadrant table. Correction to the review: “Job replacement and redistribution” is on his 2018 list, not the “risen in significance” list; 06 states it correctly. |
| U2 | Purpose and justice missing | Yes (FFTF pp.287–290; 2019-03-31; 2020-11-12; 2024-07-13; 2025-01-07) | FIXED. New §3.0; justice paragraph in §3.6; new §4.11; distribution folded into §5.10; “neither camp” (oxygen; FFTF p.290). Excluded-book sentences of 2026-05-21 avoided. |
| U3 | Jobs nearly absent | Yes (transcript l.137–189; 03 §4.6; leaders comparison) | FIXED. New §5.10; jobs and energy rows in §6.3; divergence in In brief. |
| U4 | Record of answering leaders unused | Yes (2023-05-15; 2023-05-25; 2023-10-02; 2024-08-04; 2024-03-21; FFTF p.249) | FIXED. New §6.5; GMO lesson in §4.2; FFTF p.249 in §5.3. |
| U5 | “Complex, not complicated” and social risk missing | Yes (2024-08-07 l.108; 2018-09-03) | FIXED in §3.1, §5.3, §7 item 7. 2016-03-02 and 2017-04-10 not added (not verified in time; lower value). |
| U6 | Integration losses (Evo 2, Asilomar, 2025-05-04, Kapoor/Narayanan, independence concessions, Waymo/Cruise, which history, consciousness) | Yes, each | FIXED (§6.1 item 9; §3.6; §3.4/§5.2/§5.5/§7 item 9; §5.4; §4.0/§5.3; §5.4/§6.2; §5.7; §3.4). |
| U7 | Future Rising and 2016–2022 underused | Yes (FR PDFs checked for all quotes) | PARTLY. FR pp.72–73, 148, 150, 152–153, 166–167 added (§3.2, §5.1, §5.8, §6.1, §10.3); 2019-03-31, 2020-10-15, 2020-11-12 added; period note in §11. 2022-02-12 and 2022-06-13 not added. |
| U8 | Load-bearing claims on 2026/[mixed] texts | Yes | FIXED. §5.2 rebuilt on 2018–2025 sources; In brief caveat; §5.4 and §7 item 7 lead with secure sources. |
| U9 | RSI absent | Yes (02 §3.9; transcript l.1110, 1159–1165) | FIXED. §9.2 row and new §9.5, flagged thin. |
| U10 | Reception not read through the lens | Yes (02 §9.2) | FIXED. New §9.6 (Marcus, Mowshowitz, Hashim, Narayanan/Kapoor, Yudkowsky). |
| U11 | §10 gaps (radiology as hype; leaded petrol; safety-culture claim; fairness to Huang; claim table) | Yes (04 l.33, 49, 69; LL2-03 p.61; 03 §4.6) | FIXED. §10.2, §10.3, new §10.5 with table. |
| U12 | §7 omits recurrent proposals | Yes | FIXED. Items 13 (expertise) and 14 (pathway mapping) added; GMO/benefits into item 12; social-risk reboot into item 7; 2025-05-04 into item 9. |
| U13 | Findings not prioritised | Yes | PARTLY. Three strongest alignments and divergences marked in In brief. Optional six-lens-question table not added. |
| U14 | Tilt negative in §1.6/§11 | Yes | FIXED (with Fa14). |
| U15 | Leaders beyond Huang thin | Yes (leaders comparison; 02 §9.2; 2025-03-02) | FIXED. §9.4 expanded (Zuckerberg, Nadella, Musk, Altman, Bengio). |
| U16 | Uncovered interview segments | Yes | FIXED. New §9.7, with silences stated. |
| U17 | Housekeeping (uncited App. A items; 391-post dating; draft intro; length) | Yes | FIXED for App. A and dating; draft intro INTERNAL; length not cut (see Size). |
Public framing (public.md)#
| # | Issue | Verified | Outcome |
|---|---|---|---|
| P1 | Appendices point to unpublished working files (06 and 05) | Yes | FIXED. 06 App. B and §1.2–1.3 replaced with neutral note; 05 §1 Sources, crosswalk, §6 preamble, T10/T11 headings, App. A preamble, App. B and App. C paths cleaned. Decision on publishing any working layer is INTERNAL. |
| P2 | Draft series introduction quoted as published | Yes | INTERNAL (gate). |
| P3 | 04 identified by draft filename | Yes | FIXED in 06 (filename removed). Renaming and final version of 04 INTERNAL. |
| P4 | 06 provenance incomplete (05 and 01–04 AI-prepared; wording; model named) | Yes | FIXED in §1.1 and §1.4. “Reviewed by him” kept per the brief’s provenance note; “reviewed and edited” question INTERNAL. |
| P5 | 05 provenance omits model, vendor, LL2-22 | Yes | FIXED (05 subtitle, Method, Limits). |
| P6 | “Clarification” wording signals off-page correction; repeated | Yes | FIXED. 06 run-ins renamed; §1.5 cites personal communication. 05 heading renamed, “cautioned against” sentence removed, eight repetitions replaced with “(§1)”. |
| P7 | Process language in 05 | Yes (corpus confirms Modem Futura is co-hosted) | FIXED (“at Maynard’s request”, “Batch readers”, “free and legitimate”, “compiled before”, “concept index Family”, “Theme file” column). |
| P8 | In brief on the article unlabelled, “endorse” | Yes | FIXED (label; “consistent with”; §10.1 retitled; his reservation added). |
| P9 | Series intro attributions stretched | Yes (draft 3 text) | FIXED in In brief and §8.5. |
| P10 | Unresolvable identifiers and code collisions | Yes | FIXED (Weighing 2009; E4 citation; 02 P/T/A/C explained; prefixes; Mirror defined; Garbee lesson renamed; Raine and Centaur glossed; “Late Lessons diagnostic lens”). “S3 2026” key kept, since supplement groups are no longer referenced publicly. |
| P11 | 05 authorship sentence implies ghost-authorship | Yes (S5) | FIXED (05 §7 item 10). |
| P12 | Garbee ruling wording could read as judgement on co-author | Yes | FIXED in 06 §1.4 and 05 §1. |
| P13 | Excluded-book residue in 05 D3 (“drift”) | Yes (2026-07-16 cites the book for “values drift”) | FIXED (05 D3 reworded to the paper’s own documentation). |
| P14 | Timestamp convention; URLs | Yes | FIXED (§1.2, §1.5). |
| P15 | “Post-recording” dated from release | Yes | FIXED (“post-release”). |
| P16 | Inconsistency on published view of Huang | Yes | FIXED (§1.1). |
| P17 | “Writing skill trained on” | Yes | FIXED (§1.2, §10). Whether to match the introduction’s “train” INTERNAL. |
| P18 | §1.1 overstatement and dating | Yes (05 §7 Phase 0) | FIXED. |
| P19 | 05 “we/our” voice | Yes | FIXED at the six flagged lines (quotations kept). |
| P20 | Loose §1.4 wording | Yes | FIXED. |
| P21 | Unspecified conflict of interest in §10.4 | Yes (04 n.4) | FIXED. |
Not changed, or outside the reviews#
- 05 still quotes “the boat has already left the harbor” (2026-05-21) in two places; the sentence sits beside a mention of the excluded book. Not flagged in public.md; already noted in INTERNAL §C. Left for decision.
- 06 now cites 2026-05-21 for three sentences (lines 46, 48 and 99 of the post), none of which mentions the excluded book.